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To Be Free

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and as the sun went down
so life went underground
except a little one
that didn't crave the sun

as soon as it grew dark
on grounds so bare and stark
a little fennec chased
his prey that fled post haste

and as his prey was caught
the strangest sight was brought
by desert lands and night:
a girl that tread so light

that she had left no sound,
no footprints on the ground
for anime was she
as far as he could see

another step he took
and gave the girl a look
so clear and harsh and brief
of fear and disbelief

and then prepared to flee
for danger he could see
but then the girl spoke loud
in voice so free and proud

hello my little friend
this here is not your end
your life has just begun
there is no need to run

my name is Lizzy Chan
and I have drawn this land
I made the cliff and plain,
the lack of snow or rain

i used my special pen
and drew all this terrain
and you are also mine
the prime of my design

but I have come this day
to take us both away
for though you're my creation
my mere imagination

I am the same as you
a picture someone drew
but let us leave today
and somehow find a way

to leave this all behind
the real world we'll find
and real we shall be
for all eternity

the fennec frowned a tad
his eyes grew dim and sad
and when he finally spoke
 his voice was hoarse and choked

alas, there'll be no gain
and now I see the chain
for how can you not see
'till now I have been free.


poem for NaPoWriMo 2015 day #01

two prompts. one form:
aspiredwriter.deviantart.com/j…
and one from:
www.deviantart.com/journal/NaP…

prompts are: fennec and lizzytheanimegirl300 :iconlizzytheanimegirl300:



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Daghrgenzeen's avatar
Absolutely wonderful. The story, the flow, the rhymings... Everything works so well.
Love it. :rose: