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With scorching heat I will rain my rapid death upon you.

Your placid splendor, vivid and vibrant will fall before me.

As you grasp helplessly at your short life, my unyielding power will obliterate you

And as you wilt silently I will rise triumphant upon your ashes.
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Reaching Out The darkness leaches around me looking for something to sink its claws into. To draw from. My whole body trembles with a yearning for life. Not for blood, but for spirit. The other part of me that is no longer human but a growing immortal calls to every part of my being. It pulls at all my resistance. For now I have none. I am still the pawn I was in life only dead. Now with suspended immortality that can be easily revoked, I suffer paying its price. I now hold a craving need that drains away all my sanity.

It pulls until I am only a wavering shadow of the person I once was, now overrun with the minds of them. Each spirit yearning for freedo
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take note that the stars rating mean nothing. the 2.5 is totally arbitrary. Specific points: "looking for something to sink its claws...

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Gamma Draconis ch01p02
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ok, here's a small tidbit of what i think. not great with visual art so i'll give it my best shot. one thing that bothers me here is t...

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Love Song
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first off i must point out that i'm not that knowledgable with visual art however i'll put my two cents in here. that thing on the rig...

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The Romance It happened that on midsummer day, when the sun was streaming down from cloudless skies and all the birds rejoiced for the beauty of the season, that Sir Esforcer took his leave of King Arthur, citing a need for adventure. This was most willingly granted, and the brave Knight rode from the castle as the sun began its journey back to the horizon.

Taking the main road west, Sir Esforcer admired the villages and farms he came through and graciously thanked the adoring populace for all their offerings of refreshment and rest. He declined the latter, however, telling all that he was determined to seek out adventure in the distant lands.

As the c
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Ok, you asked for a critique so here are my thoughts on this little story. It is meant to help and is just my opinion. Positives: Th...

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Duet Seattle is iconic for the Space Needle, but it's famous for two things: Starbucks and rain. Pike Place Public Market boasts no less than fourteen distinct coffee shops. Some of them serve coffee and tea and baked goods; some branch out further into sandwiches and soups; a few even dare call themselves restaurants. It is one reason I adore the Market; it has retained the individuality that small businesses are supposed to exude.

The crumpled and folded bills littering the inside of my saxophone case certainly add to my love of the place. I come here every Saturday afternoon, for the acoustics, but some think I'm good enough to pay for the ple
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Moments Later
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well i don't know how this was before the edit (if you edited anything more than that one word) however you managed to show the event ...

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This April I took upon myself to do both ScriptFrenzy and NaPoWriMo. I'm also a frequent visitor at LITplease's chatroom: [link] where a new prompt is posted for every one of the 30 days of April. Please come in and say hello. I've been using these prompts for my daily poems. I've finished all 30 poems! You can see them in the list here.

I've had a difficult start with my ScriptFrenzy script but I managed to close the gap. Wrote 40 pages today and barely made it. Had to stretch the ending a bit. I will probably erase the end when I revise it. I'm submitting to dA all of my poems but not my script. If you care to take a look at them and maybe give some feedback I will be delighted :)

A list of my NaPoWriMo poems:
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:bulletgreen: DAY #01 The Basket
:bulletyellow: DAY #02 A Night Like This
:bulletgreen: DAY #03 On A Mission
:bulletyellow: DAY #04 Royo Coyo
:bulletgreen: DAY #05 Fleeting Colors
:bulletyellow: DAY #06 Being Gay - A Biased View
:bulletgreen: DAY #07 The Final Row
:bulletyellow: DAY #08 The race to save the world assailed.
:bulletgreen: DAY #09 Boomerang
:bulletyellow: DAY #10 The Poison Pill
:bulletgreen: DAY #11 Hot Liquid
:bulletyellow: DAY #12 Your Voice
:bulletgreen: DAY #13 The Devil Within
:bulletyellow: DAY #14 Color Blind
:bulletgreen: DAY #15 Distance
:bulletyellow: DAY #16 Martin Hill
:bulletgreen: DAY #17 Life
:bulletyellow: DAY #18 The Wrongs
:bulletgreen: DAY #19 Close Distance
:bulletyellow: DAY #20 Never Say Never
:bulletgreen: DAY #21 Long Death
:bulletyellow: DAY #22 Us
:bulletgreen: DAY #23 Imprisoned
:bulletyellow: DAY #24 Final Moments
:bulletgreen: DAY #25 Smudge Of Paint
:bulletyellow: DAY #26 Supreme
:bulletgreen: DAY #27 The Other Way
:bulletyellow: DAY #28 Misunderstood
:bulletgreen: DAY #29 End Of The Day
:bulletyellow: DAY #30 Friendship

April is just about over and I just barely managed to finish all 100 pages of my script! :dummy: it will need some revising but all in all I think it came out rather good :aww: not posting it though :shrug:

Everything else I've been shamefully putting off though I might start doing a bit more in the next few days. Maybe.
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Mood: Joy ~tasadatostadas May 4, 2012  New member
amazing work. your writings are very descriptive and artsy. Great job!
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~AspiredWriter May 4, 2012
thank you so much :aww: are you reffering to any in particular?

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Mood: Zest ~tasadatostadas May 6, 2012  New member
Umm.. its hard to choose which one i like the best. I guess im referring to your overall style, its so powerful and u can see the message in it. Ur poems are so cool :D
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~AspiredWriter May 6, 2012
thank you :blush: so you're reffering to my poems?

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~FallingAsleepTonight Apr 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Clicked on "random deviant" and it sent me to you!
I write non-melodramatic free verse poetry, something that (I hope) people can find enjoyable even if you aren't a lit fanatic (just in case you're interested):P

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"It is preferable to do a dull thing with style than a dangerous thing without."
-Charles Bukowski
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"Fancy thinking the Beast was something you could hunt and kill."
-William Golding
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~AspiredWriter Apr 30, 2012
hmm... i'm more into prose than poetry but it's sweet :aww: nice to meet you :wave: have you done NaPoWriMo this year? i just finished it myself.

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~FallingAsleepTonight Apr 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I write a little prose too, I kind of skip across genres

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"It is preferable to do a dull thing with style than a dangerous thing without."
-Charles Bukowski
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"Fancy thinking the Beast was something you could hunt and kill."
-William Golding
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~AspiredWriter Apr 30, 2012
i go all over myself. from prose to poetry to scripts to photography and digital art and fractals and traditional arts. i like a bit of each though mostly i like writing prose and seeing beautiful pictures and videos. i looked at your page. wow! is there a lit group you are not member of? i found at least five or six that i'm in too including Written-Imagination which i'm a contributor of...

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=Evlydia Apr 27, 2012  Student General Artist
:poke:

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Check out my Pagan group [link]

....So am I to understand there is, in fact, no bunny? :grump:
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~AspiredWriter Apr 27, 2012
:hug: i'm there if you want to talk :aww:

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=Loza-Muse Apr 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Halloooo :3

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~AspiredWriter Apr 13, 2012
:aww:

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=Loza-Muse Apr 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
How is thee?

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~AspiredWriter Apr 13, 2012
ok. how goes the contest judging?

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*KnittedBunny Apr 12, 2012  Student General Artist
Hey there! It's great to have you as a new member of #being-bi, and we are all looking forward to getting to know you and your art better. If you have any questions, concerns or suggestions, please be sure to let me or our founder ~Asphalt-Angel know! As it is, we have an FAQ, a number of discussion topics, a resource list for bisexuals, a very large gallery, a chatroom, and an upcoming support team. We hope these resources are useful to you!

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~AspiredWriter Apr 20, 2012
hey i should also mention one more thing i've just noticed. in the rules it says not to use group notes. finding the founder and contributors is no easy feat. there's no mention of you guys, of who is running the group. people in charge should always be accessible. thankfully i kept this note so i could use it to find you (my memory is not the best) and i gathered that asphalt is in charge from the fact he's the one doing the posting of journals. however it's a bit like solving a mystery... just fyi...

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*KnittedBunny Apr 20, 2012  Student General Artist
We're glad you could be of help too XD feedback is always great! And I'll forward your new comments to AsphaltAngel (who's a girl, just fyi!) and we'll see what she can do about it :) thanks!

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~AspiredWriter Apr 12, 2012
thank you for the greeting :aww:

i'm grateful to be a part of being-bi. however i do have something to say about the main page. it bothered me even as i was joining and it almost made me not join. the rules (which are nescessary) are written in my opinion in a rather negative way. it made me feel like i may not be welcome. it's extremely aggressive. also, i think there should be a welcome note to all that visit the page. it's great to get this message after joining but it'd be great to have a nice message on the main page of the group. a good example for this would be your affilliate: :iconthe-da-advice-line: that i also joined after following the link from being-bi's home page. it makes a great deal of difference to be greeted.

other than that, i'm glad that there is a home for bi people. and happy to be part of it.

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*KnittedBunny Apr 12, 2012  Student General Artist
Thanks so much for your feedback! I'm 100% certain that our admin AsphaltAngel doesn't mean to be at all negative, but I'll def pass on the message to her. And that's actually a really good idea about the welcome message on the main page - again, I'll tell her your thoughts. We're happy you could be part of our dA bi community :D

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~AspiredWriter Apr 20, 2012
were the rules re-written? i can't remember how they were exactly but they seem more positive now. so if it has changed since my last comment then i'm grateful you took me seriously and glad that i could be of help :aww:

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=Evlydia Apr 4, 2012  Student General Artist
:shakefist: You left when I was in the middle of typing.

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....So am I to understand there is, in fact, no bunny? :grump:
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~AspiredWriter Apr 5, 2012
i did? :ohnoes: what were you going to say?

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=Evlydia Apr 5, 2012  Student General Artist
"Hi"

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....So am I to understand there is, in fact, no bunny? :grump:
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~AspiredWriter Apr 5, 2012
oh... well...

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=Loza-Muse Mar 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!

:tighthug: I hope you've had an awesome day! Sorry this is so late!

But happy birthdaay :party:

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